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Waiting For The Sun by ~Mahkohime:iconMahkohime:



The candy-cane stripes
Look frozen now,
On the old lighthouse
At the lake.

Sand on the once busy beach
Lies undisturbed,
Except for the frothy waves
Rising to meet it.

The water looks
Restless as it
Churns old shells
And Petoskey stones
Beneath its surface.

Boats left in the harbor
Sway in the icy breeze,
Dancing until their owners
Return yet again.

But for now,
Everything waits
For the Sun.
©2006-2009 ~Mahkohime
:iconmahkohime:

Author's Comments

I had to write some poems for my creative writing class (yeah, I took another creative writing class). I think it turned out okay...:)

EDIT: You may need to click "download" if you can't read some of the words...^^;

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:icondannycam:
that's pretty ^.^ !!!

very nice :)

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:iconhif-jif:
Reading it made me chilly with all the refrences to cold and water. Of course I may just be chilly because its 65 degrees in this room. :XD: This is really nice. I like it :D
:iconmahkohime:
Thank you! And thanks for the fave! :hug:

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:iconmahkohime:
Thank you...yeah, I know the imagery was a bit...cold...:D

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"Death is lighter than a feather, Duty is heavier than a mountain" -Wheel of Time
:iconhif-jif:
It was good though :D It worked anyway. :XD:
:iconthejade:
Wow that was such a beautiful poem! I love the descripitions like candy-cane stripes. Really good ^^ :hug:

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:iconmahkohime:
Thank you! Thanks for the fave, too...

It's odd that my inspiration for this poem came from FFVII:AC music...:o

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"Death is lighter than a feather, Duty is heavier than a mountain" -Wheel of Time
:iconkoenken:
Very nice poem.
I think you did a great job with word selections.

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:iconmastersephy:
none too bad, and i hope the class goes well. i took a creative writing class and i adored it.

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